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The companies main compettitive advantage lie in it's supply chain, which have been developed over 15 years, this allows them to under-cut rivals prices while maintaining margins.
After
The company's main competitive advantage lies in its supply chain, which has been developed over 15 years. This allows it to undercut rivals' prices while maintaining margins.
Editor's Notes
Corrected apostrophe misuse (companies → company's, it's → its), subject–verb agreement (lie → lies, have → has), spelling (compettitive), and split a comma splice into two sentences. Content untouched — this is the client's own analysis, now error-free.
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It could possibly be argued that there is perhaps a degree of likelihood that attachment styles which are formed in the early childhood period of a person's life may potentially have some form of influence on the relationships that they go on to form later in their adult lives.
After
Attachment styles formed in early childhood plausibly influence adult relationships.
Editor's Notes
Removed stacked hedging (could possibly, perhaps, potentially, some form of) and redundant phrasing, keeping a single appropriate qualifier (plausibly). The client's claim is unchanged — it now reads with academic confidence instead of apology.
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Client's draft chapter presented three case studies in sequence, with the theoretical framework introduced only in the conclusion, and no signposting between sections.
After
Editor's feedback: move the framework section before the cases so each one can be read against it; add a one-paragraph roadmap at the chapter opening; end each case with an explicit link back to the research question; merge cases two and three, which currently repeat the same point with different examples.
Editor's Notes
Structural feedback is delivered as margin comments and a summary memo — the client makes the changes themselves, which is exactly what a supervisor would expect. This example paraphrases a typical feedback set.
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R v Brown 1994 - House of lords. (see also the human rights act, art 8 ECHR)
After
R v Brown [1994] 1 AC 212 (HL); Human Rights Act 1998; Convention for the Protection of Human Rights and Fundamental Freedoms (European Convention on Human Rights, as amended), art 8.
Editor's Notes
Reformatted case and statute citations to OSCOLA convention — neutral citation, law report reference, court abbreviation, and correct statute and treaty forms. We also flag pinpoint references the client needs to confirm against their sources.
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I gave the patient their meds and observed them after. The sats were low-ish so I told the nurse in charge and we did obs more often.
After
I administered the prescribed medication and monitored the patient afterwards. As oxygen saturation had fallen below the target range, I escalated to the nurse in charge and the frequency of observations was increased in line with the NEWS2 protocol.
Editor's Notes
Elevated informal register (meds, low-ish, obs) to professional clinical language and connected the action to the relevant escalation protocol the client had discussed elsewhere in their draft. The clinical events and reflection remain exactly as the client reported them.
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In this chapter it will be discussed about the results which was obtained from the experiments that we have made in the laboratory conditions.
After
This chapter discusses the results obtained from our laboratory experiments.
Editor's Notes
Resolved common second-language patterns — dummy construction (it will be discussed about), agreement (results which was), and phrasal redundancy — into concise academic English. A learning note explains each pattern so the client can self-correct in future chapters.
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